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Page one:
Spiderman is swinging through the town. His spider-sense goes off.
SPIDEY: Hey!
He swings towards a bank, where several people are being rounded out of the doors, hands up. He drops down and goes through the doors of the bank. There is an unseen criminal there, who is holding up the bank. He is pointing his fist at the man behind the counter, who is handing him money nervously. Spiderman walks towards him.
SPIDEY: Hey, you know you could have waited in line just like everybody els -
He puts his hand on the crooks shoulder, who turns around and faces Spidey. He is wearing an odd-looking mask that looks a bit like a crazy creepy carnival mask. It has ears that point up like Wolverine's hair. Across his brown jacket, the words 'The Owl' are stitched on. He cocks his head at Spidey and raises his arms. We see now that his fists each have three claws sticking up - like Wolverine.
SPIDEY: Woah. Jeez. You know that Carny looks really doesn't work for you.
THE OWL: Spiderman. Ha. You look more.... frightening on T.V.
The man lunges at Spidey, slicing at the air when he dodges. Spidey ducks a huge swipe then comes up and punches the man in his odd, hard mask.
SPIDEY: Agggh!
He clutches his hand. The man takes the oppurtunity to kick him in the face. Spidey staggers back. The man jumps at him but Spidey is gone and clinging to the ceiling. Spidey grabs a bar and spins around on it to deliver a kick into the man's chest. He lands on teh man and punches him quickly.
SPIDEY: 'The Owl'? For real? When yuo go to jail, can you tell all the other crazy Wolverine-rejects that yuo guys are getting worse.
The man jumps up and pulls a gun out of his jacket. He grabs a nearby woman, who is on her knees with her hands up, and puts it to her head.
THE OWL: Back off, mother******! One more move and I'll put a bullet through this skank's head!
Spidey stops and stares.
SPIDEY: N-no.... you can't....
THE OWL: That's right. The civilian. The useless pile of flesh who's respect and love you try to win every day, but they'll never give it to you. They hate you, and they always will. And you know why? It's because the civilia -
There is a familiar 'Thwap' and he looks down. His hand is webbed up. He drops the woman.
THE OWL: Holy....
He yanks at the web with his free hand but that one gets webbed too. He looks up.
SPIDEY: You know, I'll never understand guys like you. Why? Why do you do this stuff? And you never learn. Never! You go on about civilians and how you're strong and I'm weak and yap yap yap yap yap and I stop you when you're monlouging. (Oh man. Am I monolouging?)
THE OWL: Go straight to - Uuunff!
A well-aimed kick brings him to the ground.
SPIDEY: Fly home, Owly! Uh, ow. That, sucked, sorry.
A woman starts clapping. The man behind the counter starts clapping. The people outside who were being rounded out slowly walk in and look around. They all start clapping.
SPIDEY: Wow. Thanks, everyone. Glad I could, uh --
A little boy runs up and hugs him. The boy looks up at him and smiles.
SPIDEY: Uh....
Cut to Peter in MJ's bedroom. He's talking to her.
MJ: He just hugged you?
PETER: Yeah.
MJ: This little boy?
PETER: Yeah.
MJ: He just ran up to you. And hugged you.
PETER: I know. I mean.... a couple of weeks ago, they were all over me. I was a wanted guy. And is that it now? They just like me all of a sudden? How do they do that? And I seem to remember all that boy from the angry mob that chased me around Manhatten after the whole Doc Ock thing.... How do they just change?
MJ: Eh. The media. They say it's cool to like you, it's cool to like you. They say form a mob and chase you to Kingdom Come....
PETER: Still.
MJ: So.... I, uh.... I saw the News.
PETER: Huh.
MJ: That girl. That X-man. Fighting with you.... why haven't you told her to - to stop?
PETER: We can stay friends. We were still friends after our break-up.
MJ: Were we, though?
PETER: I don't ask her to come and help. And, I mean, like, there's a difference between fighting alongside me and - you know. I mean I fight with Daredevil and it doesn't mean we're.... (I can't believe I just said that)
Anyay. More later!
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Sweet. Keep it coming. 
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Cool beans!
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Thanks guys!
At Peter's house. He is watching TV on the couch. Aunt May approaches the door and puts her coat on.
AUNT MAY: Peter, I'm meeting Miles at the Ice Cream store.
PETER: Uh-huh.
AUNT MAY: I'll be home about six.
PETER: Uh-huh.
AUNT MAY: And please.... be careful.
PETER: Uh-huh.
She kisses him on the cheek and walks out the door. She opens her umbrella and walks down the street. Peter is still watching T.V. He was clearly not paying attention to her. He is fixed on the T.V.
T.V.: " -- following Wilson Fisk's arrest, an asassin who formerly worked for the crime boss has escaped from maximum security. Channel Nine News cannot reveal the convict's name due to security reasons, but he has been described as armed and dangerous and is currently wanted dead or alive."
The phone rings. Peter jumps up, surprised.
PETER: Yiyy!
He gets it. MJ talks into the phone.
MJ: Hey!
PETER: Jeez! Don't do that."
MJ: What?
PETER: That!
MJ: You watching?
PETER: Uh-huh.
MJ: Are you watching T.V.?.
PETER: Yup. I'd better swing by to Ryker's and check it out.
MJ: I love it when you talk tough.
PETER: .... Are you feeling okay?
MJ: I don't know.... I just feel happy. I love you, you know.
PETER: Uh....
MJ: Do you wanna come over?
PETER: I have to go.
MJ: Come on....
PETER: I'm - I'm sorry, I gotta go. I'll call you later.
MJ: But the -
He hangs up. We see MJ was sitting on her bed. Liz Allen is next to her.
LIZ: No. Don't force it on him like that. You were totally forcing it on him. You gotta be calm.
MJ looks grim.
At the jail. It is raining heavily. The institute is surrounded by guards and squad cars. Spidey is watching from a large cliffside. He is thinking.
SPIDEY CAPTION: Damn. Guards everywhere. What am I doing here? I can't believe I blew MJ off like that. I blew off making out with my girlfriend for standing here in my tights in the rain getting soaked. This is not how I pictured my day. I should just go. Go home. Go to MJ's.
He jumps off the cliff and lands behind a squad car. He slowly creeps towards the entrance, behind the cops.
SPIDEY CAPTION: This is insane. I can't be doing this here. I'm sneaking around in my spider costume, dodging cops to break into a jail. Not ou -
He jumps up as a face comes through the wall. It is Kitty, in a new mask (thankfully).
KITTY: Peter?
PETER: Jitty! What are you doing?
KITTY: Sneaking around looking for clues about the guy who escaped. You?
PETER: What are you? Mystery Inc? I'm the resident super-guy around here. And that new look totally doesn't work for you.
KITTY: Shut up. There are cops everywhere. I'm taking a risk just by being here talking to you.
PETER: So go home!
KITTY: I seem to be doing a much better job here than you. I've already questioned, like, five jailbirds here - and besides, you can't walk though walls.
PETER: Stop this! Stop it. You're being childish and stupid and - and it's stupid. I can't believe I'm here doing this with you.
KITTY: Huh. Well now the feelings are clear.
She phases through the wall.
SPIDEY CAPTION: Arrrrggghhhh! Why is she doing this to me? Why is she here? Why is she always everywhere I'm supposed to be but ten seconds earlier!
Cut to Rykers custody. It is two days later. There is a large man in his cell, in the bottom bunk of his bed. Another man is above him. The man in the top bunk is shivering.
MAN: Oh man. Oh Jeez. Oh man.
He turns to face the man beneath him.
MAN: Do you ever, like, think that everyone's against you! 'Cause they are, I swear!
He continues to shiver. The large man beneath him looks depressed and turns to face us. We all recognise him as Wilson Fisk.
DUN DUN DUUUUUUUN!!!!
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| Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2007 1:37 pm Post subject: |
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Oh, crap!! Nice!
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Later that day:
Mary Jane is sitting alone in a diner. She is prodding some food with a fork.
MJ CAPTION: Where is he? Is he in trouble? What if he's in trouble? I can't believe he wo -
She clutches her arm suddenly. It is shaking. She shuts her eyes.
Cut to Spidey. He is swinging through town.
SPIDEY CAPTION: Woah, man! Late! Late! Man!
At the diner again. MJ is looking at a man who has just walked in. She doesn't know who he is, but he resembles Deathstroke. He looks very suspicious. He has a huge backpack on. She stares at him in fear.
Back to Spidey. He leaps off a building-top and shoots a web.
Back to MJ. The man reaches into his pocket and slowly takes out a small control. He presses it.
Back to Spidey. He lands ontop of the Diner. There is a sudden explosion. Spidey is thrown backwards into a wall. He slides down it. A man emerges from the smoking ruins of the small diner that was blown up. He was the man who was wearing the backpack. Bits of his face are peeling off to reveal a metallic skeleton behind him (like Terminator, kinda)
DEATHSTROKE: See that! Huh? Did you see what I did? That was me! Right there!
SPIDEY: You again?
Another figure leaps onto the bomber. It is.... MJ, in crazy furry goblin form. She roars at him and tears at him. Sparks fly out and he screams. She knocks him down and circles him before leaping on him. She pulls his arms off.
DEATHSTROKE: Gerraway! Gah! Gerraway!
He takes a gun out but she pulls it out his hands and throws it away. Spidey watches in confusion, anticipation and fear. MJ quickly twists the crazy cyber guy and pulls his head off. Oil leaks out of his neck. MJ-Furry-Hamster-Goblin sniffs at him.
SPIDEY: Oh, man....
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| Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2007 2:35 pm Post subject: |
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"Hamster-Goblin"... 
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| Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2007 3:37 pm Post subject: |
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Sweet man this kicks ass!!!!
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| Ultimates_rock25 wrote: | Nice avatar
BTW when I said Deathstroke I think I meant Deathlok. Sorry about that. |
Oh!! I thought you meant DC's Deathstroke!
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| Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2007 5:55 pm Post subject: |
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Lol Yeah I got confused.
Thanks Cowboy!
Here's the last part of issue one:
GUARD: You know what I think bugs you most of all?
At Rykers. The guard is taunting Fisk through his cell.
GUARD: I think that what bugs you most of all is that all that dirty money, those ill-gotten goods all went straight to charity. To orphans. Little orphaned kids are playing with little orphan toys bought with your money. I think that's what bugs you most of all -
Another guard enters.
GUARD 2: You have a visitor, fat man.
A man in a bobble hat walks in. Kingpin sits down at the table facing him. He looks slightly shocked when he sees who it is.
KINGPIN: You.
MAN: Aren't you happy to see me?
KINGPIN: How did you get here?
MAN: I was in the neighbourhood.... busted out o' jail on Monday. Got a place and a fake I.D. on Tuesday. Came here - today.
Fisk is not amused. He looks grim.
MAN: I heard you got taken down. Shifty sort o' guy.... Grace - Grant?
KINGPIN: Spector.
MAN: Figured you might pay big bucks for his.... takin' care of.
KINGPIN: And how would I do that from in here?
MAN: Here's how I see it.
He leans forward.
MAN: I go after this dude. Three days. He ain't got a bullet in his head in three days, I get nothing. This is over. Kaput. But if he does.... which he will.... fifty-hundred.
KINGPIN: Ha.
MAN: Dollars.
KINGPIN: I don't care about Spector. I don't care. His time will come. He is nothing.
He pushes a photo of Spiderman at the man in the bobble hat.
KINGPIN: This is what I need. I need this creature. It was him. He set this up. All him. He is the reason we are here now.
GUARD TO GUARD 2: What are they talking about?
The man leans back.
MAN: Spiderman, huh?
He smiles and takes off his hat. We see a red bullseye tattoo printed on his forehead. The guards gasp from outside. He throws a nearby paperclip at one. He cluches his neck and falls to the ground. A few well-aimed shurikens hit the other guard in the chest.
MAN: Bullseye. But first, we gotta break you outta here, Fisky.
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| Posted: Thu Aug 16, 2007 8:22 pm Post subject: |
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GREAT!!!!! 
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| Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 1:11 am Post subject: |
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Sweet...
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Two months ago: In a courtroom.
COP: Do you swear to tell the truth, the whole truth and nothing but the truth so help you God?
SPECTOR: I do.
COP: Proceed.
Kingpin is sittting in the audience. There is a nervous-looking lawyer next to him. Matt Murdock is Spector's lawyer. He smiles at Fisk. Kingpin's lawyer gets up.
LAWYER: Mr Specor. It is true that you are indeed, a victim of schizophrenia?
Murdock chuckles. Inside Spector's head. The little girl with no eyes, Moon Knight, Spector and Grant are talking. Ronin is not there, surprisingly.
GIRL: What are we supposed to do now, Grant?
GRANT: Well your testimony isn't exactly going to bode well in court.
SPECTOR: And yours is? None of our voices will be heard. Fisk is as good as free.
MOON KNIGHT: Stop being such a coward, Spector. Speak up. Fisk must go down. He is the goal.
GIRL: Remember?
GRANT: Do it.
GRANT, GIRL AND MOON KNIGHT: Do it.
Back in Court. Spector blinks.
SPECTOR: I - I am.
LAWYER: Yes. Y - You are. Uh.... and what proof do you have that Wilson Fisk is the Kingpin of Crime that you say he is?
In Spector's head.
GRANT: You got shot in the head, Spector. Tell them.
MOON KNIGHT: Tell them.
GIRL: Shut up, guys.
Fisk looks mad.
One month ago: At Rykers. Fisk is handcuffed and being walked down the corridor by Cops. Prisoners stare through the bars at him.
COP: Your new cellmate, Fisk.
He opens the doors of the cell. There is a man on the top bunk, shaking.
MAN: Uh - Uh - Uh - Oh Jeez!
Fisk looks madder.
Today: Outside Rykers. Bullseye is standing, facing it. He is in a long trenchcoat. We can't see his face.
BULLSEYE: Clearing the building now, sir.
KINGPIN (in earpiece): Proceed.
He crosses the road and walks across to the jail. There are two guards there.
GUARD: Excuse me, do you have a -
He falls to the ground. The other guard follows. Bullseye walks on into the jail. He pulls a playing card out of his pocket and the cop behind the reception counter falls onto the desk. Bullseye turns and presses a button on the wall. All over the building, cell doors slide open. The inhabitants slowly get up and walk out. Bullseye takes off his coat. We see he's in a whole bodysuit (like Spidey, kind of) with knives and guns and ammunition strapped onto him.We can't see his face because he has a full mask on, with two white eyes and a black target on his head.
BULLSEYE: I love my job.
He runs through the doors, brandishing two sais.
Next: The truth about MJ and her Ultimate Demogoblin form! Fisk breaks out of jail! And.... someone's house blows up!
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| Posted: Fri Aug 17, 2007 10:47 am Post subject: |
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Hot dizzam!
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What up, G? (Never said that before...)
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