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UltimateKevin! · Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 1:03 am Post subject: The Chaos Theory

Ok I just saw both The Butterfly Effect and Donnie Darko movies and I'm anxious to write this story. If you've seen any of these movies do not worry! I won't be ripping off any of the movies' incredible events that take place.

Oh! And the first character is...

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UltimateKevin! · Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 1:03 am Post subject:

...well since this isn't in contuinity: Silver Surfer. He won't be the main character but he will have his moments. He'll need his cosmic power like our next character will...

UltimateKevin! · Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 1:04 am Post subject:

...need his people-- Black Bolt. The Inhumans will now for the first time see how it feels to be normal homo sapien cavemen. This the Chaos Theory we're talking about remember? Anything goes...

UltimateKevin! · Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 1:04 am Post subject:

...so say if someone like The Punisher. Is he considered as anything goes?

Castle will be considered in my opinion the main character. The Marvel Universe will have to decide whether or not to save him and face some rather odd consequences or to kill him and still have wierd consequences...

UltimateKevin! · Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 1:05 am Post subject:

...and that's where Uatu the Watcher comes in. He's like the person who does not believe in anything he does not forsee. He sees it; he is confident in that being true. Now when he sees the ripples that's when his "policy of not interfering" will be put to the test...

UltimateKevin! · Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 1:05 am Post subject:

...and testing Uatu will be Sentry. With his immense power he will provide to the story by stopping certain events from happening. In one scenerio he will make a fateful desicion that will have chaotic effects.

An herald, a king, a vigilante, an observer, and a demented hero. Our next character will bring something new to the table...

UltimateKevin! · Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 1:06 am Post subject:

...Damion Hellstorm... The Son of Satan will be this story's antagonist. He will shatter the world as we know it. His motives will at first be unknown... What's a good story without a great villain...?

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UltimateKevin! · Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 1:06 am Post subject:

Plot Synopsis:

Deja Vu

Ever feel like going back to the past because you regret something? Say, stopping yourself from commiting homocide?...
Ever think about the consequences of your actions? Most of the time you wouldn't. But hey; it's not your fault. Not everyone has their whole life planned out right?...
Do you feel like the world could stop from existing just because you forgot to go to work? No really; think about it. Is it that destiny has already set your path and all you need to do is follow it? And if you decide to ignore the path and set up your own? Will you regret it and stop yourself regret it and stop yourself?...

Coming Soon
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bobbydrake · Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 1:38 am Post subject:

Ah! Kevin, why are you using that avatar! That's the same one DragynWulf uses! It scared me when I saw it!

But I like the idea for the story!
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UltimateKevin! · Posted: Mon Jan 29, 2007 1:44 am Post subject:

And thanks!

bobbys__ex · Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 12:15 am Post subject:

So I was just wondering, because I've never done any kind of Fan Fiction... Does just one person write the whole thing and everyone else reads it? Or does everyone sort of pitch in to write the story?

bobbydrake · Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 12:46 am Post subject:

Usually it's just one person writing. Like, if someone wrote their own comic, you would post it here. Our Penultimate comics are kinda like Fan Fic, only sillier.
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CowBoy From Hell · Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 1:21 am Post subject:

Nice.
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bobbys__ex · Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 1:23 am Post subject:

Are you going to start a Penultimate X-Men fan fiction thing?

I think I am going to start a Penultimate Spider-Man one sometime this week, once I get a few more issues.

Or would that be not a good thing to put into fan fiction? Since it is definitely not serious at all.

CowBoy From Hell · Posted: Tue Jan 30, 2007 1:24 am Post subject:

It's fanfic. You can post what ever you want as long as it has a story
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UltimateKevin! · Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 5:52 am Post subject: Deja Vu (pt. I)

Deja Vu (pt. I)

This page is entirely black with the following dialogue

?: I'm so sorry...
? #2: Why? He deserved this.
?: Will you ever shut the f*** up?!
? #2: Castle was a madman, Doctor Pym. He deserved this.
?: Castle... he-- he told me... F*** it!! I...

:: The Moon is shown behind a tall building and inside in one of the windows you see a figure
TEXT BOX ?: ...He warned me...
CAPTION: One Week For the New World...
CAPTION 2: Frank Castle A.K.A. The Punisher's Safehouse...
PUNISHER MONOLOGUE: Haven't slept in so damn long...

:: Castle is sitting on a bed wearing a wife beater with cargo jeans glaring out the window
SFX: PUUN-PUUN PUUN-PUUN
PUNISHER: The f***?

:: Close up on Castle's clenched fists
SFX: PLAC

:: Reader is looking at Castle's arms spread out and opening a cabinet

:: Castle pulls twin rifles with a grim face
PUNISHER MONOLOGUE: How long has it been? One week...? Two weeks...? Aw well...

:: Castle pulls and pushes rifles
SFX: CA-CLAC
PUNISHER: Hun-hunh... Love that sound...

:: A foot is shown stepping onto the gravel
CAPTION: 4 minutes before...

:: A man is shown to be an Italian with his hair combed to the right and is wearing a white coat with an inner tuxedo, a white pair of pants, and with Gucci shoes and is standing in front of a limousine
?: Where the hell are we Gustrav?
GUSTRAV: Oh Yeah...

:: The Italian man turns his head to the left to see the chauffeur Gustrav in the driver's seat talking to himself
GUSTRAV: No he's almost... No wait a min-- you said--! <SIGH> Oh... No, go on. See, I thought we were supposed to have a conversation--

:: The Italian man walks past the engine of the limo with his left eyebrow lifted
GUSTRAV: --not a 2 cent bi*** yelling an' not lettin' the other ma--! Oh my G-- Shut the-- shut the f-- just shut the f*** up!!

:: The Italian man walks up to the driver's side of the limo
GUSTRAV: Giovanni? She's actin' like such a-- I know! Like a no good--

:: Italian man leans up to the black tinted window
GUSTRAV: Gio? Hey! Can you hear me? Dammit! "Company with the less dropped phone calls" my ass...

:: Gustrav is shown to be with an earpiece on his left ear
SFX: PLUNC PLUNC

:: Gustrav reacts to the knocking by placing his palm on his left eye and his fingers on his right
CHAFFEUR: Aaaaw caarap...

:: Repeat--> "Italian man leans up to the black tinted window"
SFX: PLUNC PLUNC
?: Gustrav?

:: Repeat--> "Gustrav reacts to the knocking by placing his palm on his left eye and his fingers on his right" except his hand is already on down on his mouth
Gustrav: Yea-- Yeah Fredo?

:: Fredo (Italian man) reaches to his coat
FREDO: Was that Giovanni? As in; Giovanni Castro? As in;... the guy my ex-wife slept with when my back was turned?

:: Gustrav keeps his head down
Gustrav: Please... I-- he-- C'mon Fredo...

:: Fredo freezes to listen
Gustrav: ...I've known the little putz since Kindergarden! We've been friends since!

:: The chauffer reaches for his hat
Gustrav: ...He's like a brother to me...

:: Fredo pulls out a pistol
FREDO: But 1) Did I hear correctly? Or did I hear you call my ex-wfie a "2 cent b****"? And 2) what the f*** where you doing talking to him in front of me when you were fully aware of my hatred for him you dumb dou***?
Gustrav: I... I am so sorry...

:: The page is corrupted by the image of glass be shattered into pieces
SFX: POON-POON POON-POON

:: Shows Castle slipping down a ladder
CAPTION: ...Now

:: The limo's windows are seen shattered on the gravel

:: Castle's caught up to scene of the crime in his classic uniform with a long rifle strapped on his back and faces down
PUNISHER: ***damn...

:: Fredo's corpse is shown covered in blood with a missing head
PUNISHER: 'The hell'd you do to deserve this, bud?

:: Castle searches for the guy's ID and instead finds a card that reads "Hits List"
The card reads:
1. Marlon Corleone
2. Michael Pacino
3. Santino Caan
4. Richard Clemenza
5. Billy Russo

:: Castle searches for the guy's ID and instead finds a card that reads "Hits List"
The card reads:
1. Marlon Corleone
2. Michael Pacino
3. Santino Caan
4. Frank Castle
5. Richard Clemenza

:: Castle raises his eyebrow in confusement

:: Castle moves his head left to right
PUNISHER MONOLOGUE: The f*** just... what do you call it? Deja Vu or some sh**?

TO BE CONTINUED...

UltimateKevin! · Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 6:25 am Post subject:

Any feedback? Razz

Is it hard to read? I feel like it's too complicated...

CowBoy From Hell · Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 6:40 pm Post subject:

Instead of retypeing it why didnt you just copy and past. Thats how i got dark day and holy wars over here.

I like it but it is a little confusing
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UltimateKevin! · Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 7:26 pm Post subject:

I never typed it in the marvel boards though. it's been... different without you guys... besides I typed it on Word but for some stupid reason I forgot to save...

I'll... wait! is it the way I make it seem like it's a draft? I didn't know how else to write it...

CowBoy From Hell · Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 7:28 pm Post subject:

Write it like a book. Just describe the setting and what the chacters do
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