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UltimateKevin! Chuck Norris

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CowBoy From Hell wrote: | Instead of retypeing it why didnt you just copy and past. Thats how i got dark day and holy wars over here.
I like it but it is a little confusing |
Oh wait! Is it the "repeating scene"? This part is called Deja Vu remember? |
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No i just keep confusing myself with the panal thing _________________ CowBoy From HEll
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UltimateKevin! Chuck Norris

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the numbers? there is no need for it huh? alright... |
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If you deleted the panal and number thing then it would work _________________ CowBoy From HEll
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UltimateKevin! Chuck Norris

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Does this look better? |
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UltimateKevin! Chuck Norris

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Deja Vu (pt. 2)
:: Castle rises up and looks to his left
:: Then to his right
:: Castle places his hand on his forehead
PUNISHER MONOLOGUE: There has to be a logical reason...
:: He wals to the limo to check if someone is still in the car
PUNISHER MONOLOGUE: I f***in' saw that card once before...
:: The chauffeur Gustrav is gone
PUNISHER MONOLOGUE: Nope... The little rat must've ran...
:: Punisher sits on the carseat
PUNSIHER MONLOGUE I must be losing is all... What a wierd--
SFX: EEOOEEOOEEOO
:: The ambulance siren makes Castle get up immediately
PUNISHER MONOLOGUE: God****it!!
:: Frank races to the fire escape ladder
PUNISHER MONOLOGUE: I can't ever catch a break can I?!
:: Castle climbs onto the ladder
PUNISHER MONOLOGUE: God**** cops...
:: He opens his window and sticks his left foot first
PUNISHER MONOLOGUE: ...Why can't they ever understand...?
:: He pulls a string
PUNISHER MONOLOGUE: I will always, always escape!
:: Punisher's entire loft is illuminated revealing Daredevil in the kitchen with his back turned to Frank
DAREDEVIL: Castle...? What the hell are you doing here?!
:: Punisher keeps his cool and picks up to drink his Miller from a table
PUNISHER: You don't even have to look at me? You're good Murdock... And this is where I'm currently living...
:: Daredevil turns around to face Castle
DAREDEVIL: Listen Castle... I don't want to hurt you...
:: Punisher squints his eyes and ignores DD completely
:: Castle looks past DD and notices a figure with a flashlight moving in the neighboring loft
:: DD steps closer
DAREDEVIL: Castle? You alright? Your heart. It's--
:: Frank steps closer to DD
PUNISHER: You-- uh... want to help me Murdock?
:: Frank places his hand on DD
DAREDEVIL: What're you--?
SFX: KLEESHH
:: Frank sprints past DD
PUNISHER: C'mon Murdock!
:: DD stops in his tracks
:: DD walks back to the kitchen
:: DD kneels down onto the aluminium floor
:: DD rubs his index and middle thumb onto Punisher's footprints
:: He smells the substance
DAREDEVIL MONOLOGUE: Blood... Dammit Castle! What've you been up to now?!
:: The bulb on the ceiling begins to swing above DD
:: DD rises up
:: Close up on DD's shocked face
DAREDEVIL: Aw, no...
:: The building explodes
SFX: BRA-KLAM
:: DD is blown through the wall
:: DD lands ontop of the limo where the paramedics are taking Fredo's corpse
PARAMEDIC: HOLY S***!!!
:: The scared paramedic falls onto the gravel floor in amazement
PARAMEDIC: Sid!! Hey Sid!!
:: The reader is then looking at a beat up and completely knocked out DD
DAREDEVIL: Castle...
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Cool man keep it coming _________________ CowBoy From HEll
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Yeah I like it! Can't wait for more!  _________________ "THE ULTIMATE MARVEL TRIVIA GAME! C'mon it's Fun!"
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UltimateKevin! Chuck Norris

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Posted: Mon Feb 05, 2007 11:36 pm Post subject: |
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Does it make sense? I thought it did; but that's just me! Is this in anyway confusing?
And thanks guys! I appreciate the feedback!!  |
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UltimateKevin! Chuck Norris

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Deja Vu (pt. 3)
:: We are looking at the local hospital
CAPTION: Four Days For the New World...
CAPTION 2: New York Presbyterian Hospital; New York
NURSE: Fractured his left shoulder; his right wrist is dislocated multiple signs of bruises...
:: Inside we see an Asian female nurse and a British senior doctor holding a clipboard and reviewing their most recent patient; Daredevil who's on bed utterly covered in with tubes throughout his body
NURSE: ...If this doesn't prove Matt Murdock's The Man Without Fear; nothing will Dr. Brown... I always knew Murdock was Daredevil...
DR. BROWN: I... and you say he's blind? It's... remarkable!
:: We see Matt's life support screen
SFX: BLEEP BLEEP BLEEP BLEEP
NURSE: Dr., look at this...
DR. BROWN: Is this his--?! Bloody hell!
:: We then see DD's face where his eyes are covered in bandages
NURSE: The patient is suffering from brain injury...
DAREDEVIL: ugh...
:: Dr. Brown and the nurse freeze
:: The clipboard falls onto the floor
:: DD rises up from the bed
DAREDEVIL: Wuh-where's Castle?
:: Dr. Brown and the nurse turn their faces toward each other
DAREDEVIL: I SAID WHERE IS FRANK CASTLE?!?!?
:: DD moves to the left of the bed to get off
DAREDEVIL: I KNOW YOU'RE HERE!! ANSWER ME!!
:: Dr. Brown steps closer towards
DR. BROWN: Matthew? I know you seem confused but--
:: DD turns his head towards the window
DR. BROWN: ...See; you've been in a coma for... how long Ashely?
ASHELY: For three days Dr. Brown...
DR. BROWN: Yes... you mustn't get up from your bed Matthew...
:: DD turns to face Dr. Brown and Ashely (nurse)
DAREDEVIL: Three days? I...
:: We see through DD's negative vision and see Punisher running
PUNISHER: C'mon Murdock!
:: Back to the present we see DD with his hand on his forehead
DAREDEVIL: But... Castle...
:: We see through DD's eyes again and see the smoke coming towards the reader
DAREDEVIL: Aw, no...
:: Back to present Dr. Brown walks toward Matt
DR. BROWN: Who is this Frank Castle? Was he in the same building as you?
:: DD looks back towards the window again as if expecting something
DAREDEVIL: Castle?
:: We then see a civilian racing down by the hospital on his rollerskates
:: A piece of a brick falls on his head
CIVILIAN: What the h--?
:: A huge chunk of rock then smashes the skater
SFX: BRU-KLUNK
:: Other civilians run away from the raining boulders
:: We then see the hospital annihilated from the inside out
:: Dr. Brown is flat on his back and astonished
DR. BROWN: Ashely?
:: We then see DD still in his green dress get up from the ground
DAREDEVIL: WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU?!?!
:: Standing beside DD is Frank
DAREDEVIL: INNOCENT PEOPLE GOT HURT!!!
:: Frank looks DD straight in the eyes
PUNISHER: It doesn't matter... We got bigger problems Murdock...
:: DD grabs Frank by the collar
DAREDEVIL: How the hell does it not matter?
:: Frank coughs and spits blood at DD
DAREDEVIL: Castle!! What the f--?!?!
:: Castle falls to the ground with both of his hands and knees on the floor
PUNISHER: They're... They're going to kill me Murdock...
:: Castle then knocks out flat onto the floor
DAREDEVIL: My God!! Castle!!
:: DD stands on his knees and places his hands on Castle's chest
DAREDEVIL: CASTLE!!!
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Sweet. _________________ CowBoy From HEll
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UltimateKevin! Chuck Norris

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Posted: Tue Feb 06, 2007 11:24 pm Post subject: |
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Deja Vu (pt. 4)
:: Matt picks Frank up
:: And places Frank on his left shoulder
DAREDEVIL: ARGH!!
:: He collapses to the floor with Frank
DAREDEVIL MONOLOGUE: My head... Unh!
:: He places his fingers on his temple
DAREDEVIL MONOLOGUE: I'm... I'm dying... Oh God... Please... ARGH!!
:: A green light appears a few feet away from the two of them
SFX: ERRRRRR
:: The light slowly expands
:: More
:: And more
:: A leg steps out from the portal
:: Out comes Frank
PUNISHER: Look at you...
:: He places his knee next to the other Frank
PUNISHER: Can't believe you're a week older than me, chump...
:: He lifts the other Frank up with both hands
PUNISHER: C'mon...
:: He throws him into the light
PUNISHER: Later, handsome...
:: He turns towards DD
PUNISHER: Dammit...
:: He picks him up
:: And throws him off the building
PUNISHER: Sorry Murdock...
:: Close up on Castle's face
PUNISHER: ...But I can't let you suffer any longer...
SFX: PU-CLACH
:: He walks away
LADY: OH MY GOD!!
:: Down the building people are crowding around DD's mangled body
MAN: H-- HE FELL OFF FROM THAT BUILDING!!!!
MAN 2: RUN!!!!
:: We see the The Sentry flying in the sky with his hand on his chin and the other on his hip
SENTRY: Then I go to the left ri--?
:: Close up on his ears
LADY: GO GET HELP-- SOMEBODY!! PLEASE!!!
:: Sentry bursts into superspeed
SENTRY: Oh well...
:: Sentry reaches his destination but cannot see through the crowd
SENTRY: What's--?
:: Close up on Robert's eyes
:: Castle out of no where is heading towards Robert in the sky with daggers in each hand
PUNISHER: Die Reynolds!!
:: Sentry grabs both of Punisher's wrists
SENTRY: Who are you?
:: Punisher places his feet on Sentry's chest
PUNISHER: I'm your worst nightmare, you scum!
:: Punisher pushes all his might on Sentry's chest
SENTRY: Do you know who you're messing with?!
:: Punisher smirks as the Sentry lets go of him
PUNISHER: Heh... you're one tough S.O.B....
:: Punisher smashes onto the cement
:: Close up on his face as blood pours from his mouth and his red eyes
LADY: OH MY GOD!!!!
:: The crowd looks up to the Sentry in horror
MAN: He-- He...
:: The man points to the Sentry
MAN: HE KILLED THEM BOTH!!!
:: Close up on the Sentry's face
SENTRY: What?
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Deja Vu (pt. 5)
:: Sentry flies downward to the cement
SENTRY: I didn't do anything!
MAN: SHUT THE F*** UP, YOU MURDERER!!!
:: Robert turns toward the man with his hands spread out and the man has his finger pointing to the sky
SENTRY: Sir, I was attacked by this man and then he let go.
MAN: I F***ING SAW YOU THROW HIM!!!
:: Robert turns toward DD's body
:: And back toward the man and has his finger pointed toward DD
SENTRY: But what about him?
:: The man looks over Sentry's shoulder
:: He then looks back at Sentry in anger and his finger right at Sentry's forehead
MAN: YOU THREW HIM AND THEN DECIDED TO PICK UP THAT OTHER MAN!!!
:: Sentry cannot believe the naive man
:: He clenches his fists and squats down to charge
SENTRY: I didn't do--
:: He releases all of his strength and flies away to the sky
SENTRY: --ANYTHING!!!!
:: The man disperses from the crowd
:: And walks away into an alley
:: By this time the ambulance arrives to the scene and quickly rush to place DD and Frank on seperate stretchers
:: The man reaches into his pocket
:: He places his cell phone to his ear
MAN: Hey... Hook line and sinker...
:: The man takes his glasses off
MAN: Sentry's been punished...
:: We are then shown inside the mind of Frank Castle through his vision where he runs off after hearing someone breaking in his neighboring loft
CAPTION: THEN...
PUNISHER: C'mon Murdock!
:: We see Castle jump off a ledge
:: And smash through the window
SFX: KLEEESH
:: He gets up
PUNISHER: Should've put more thought into that little "Work of Art"...
:: He sees a black shadow move to his left
PUNISHER: The hell was that?
:: He turns around
:: Daimon Hellstrom is leaning beside the corridor door on his right shoulder wearing a dark coat and a crucifix necklace with his arms crossed and his eyes glowing dark red
SON OF SATAN: You're Castle right? Burn in hell...
:: Frank crosses his arms to defend himself
PUNISHER: Aw crap!!
:: He shuts his eyes
:: Repeat
:: Repeat
:: He opens them
:: He is standing in a light green infinite room
PUNISHER: Is this--?
:: He places his hand on his sweaty forehead
PUNISHER: What the hell is going on? I--
:: He looks up to find Uatu standing right in front of him
:: Close up on Uatu's eyes
UATU: Prepare yourself Francis...
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Nice. _________________ CowBoy From HEll
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WHOA! This sereies Rocks hard! Good Work Kevin!  _________________ "THE ULTIMATE MARVEL TRIVIA GAME! C'mon it's Fun!"
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